3月7日雅思考試大作文解析
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本文的Assignment 是问题类的措辞。这个题目是说寿命长对个人和社会有什么影响，其实某種程度上就是问各位年纪大的人对個人和社会有什么影响。
思路：
1. 对個人的影响
1) 向外看——对年轻人
观点：寿命变长——larger proportion of elders---render the youth disadvantaged in the workplace
论证：It can be observed that young people might be deprived of their opportunities to develop their abilities as more old people could mean that they have more chances to occupy essential social positions。
內部可以配搭實驗法。
A group of researchers in the University of Suzhou conducted a research recently on white-collar workers aging from 25-35 in international companies, whose result revealed that three out five people expressed they could hardly get promoted to managerial posts owing to the large number of senior citizens who held supervisory positions。
2) 向外kan(看)——對家人
老年人可以活得更久——就可以更好地照顧他們De(的)子女甚至是孫兒，對于家庭的幸福和穩定是很有好處的。
观点：Longer life span could contribute to the happiness and stability of a family。
论证：Longer life span gives rise to a growing number of aging population, who can actually attend to their own offspring who are either too busy to take care of themselves or too young to look after themselves. Offered the proper guidance and attendance from the older generation, the youth are more likely to focus on their own business。
內部可以配搭舉例子使用。
Take China for example. Due to fierce competition in society, a majority of parents have to spend most of their time on their work, rendering their own children lonely and abandoned. In that case, grandparents of those children could at least mitigate this situation by giving priority to the younger generation。
2 对于社会的影响
本質法：這是個信息化社會，更多需要的是經驗和信息，而年紀較大的人無疑可以提供更多的資源和經驗，有助于社會的成長和進步。
观点：Longer life span offers the working population more opportunities to contribute themselves to the accumulation of social wealth。
论证： In this information age characterized by experience, the old who enjoy more social and job experience could lend their hand to a great many junior workers by sharing their experience and resources。
內部可以配搭例子法或實驗fa(法)使用。
例子：For example, senior salesmen in a company could recommend several return customers to junior salesmen and provide wise suggestions for them when they are confronted with difficulties。
Gradually, the whole company is expected to attain more wealth and to reward social members in return。
最後成文
開頭段：兩句話
1 转述原文
The issue of increasingly longer life span is of much contention to the general public。
2 提出文章要探讨的内容
Therefore, this essay aims to identify the possible effects that this change has brought to both individuals and society。
中間段：
建議寫三段
兩種chu(處)理方式：第一種先寫兩點對于個人的ying(影)響，再寫對于社hui(會)的。
第二種先寫壽命長對于個人和社會好的影響，再寫壞的影響。
結尾段
1 总结文章影响
Therefore, although senior citizens might, to some extent, deprive the younger generation of their job opportunities, they tend to enlighten the whole society with their experience and care。
2 提出建议(主要针对年轻人)
Therefore, the youth are suggested to confront this situation. If they could not be offered the opportunities, it would prove that they were not so capable as the old generation, when the only way out was to learn from old people and try to gain more experiences。
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